Amazing Rewrite

Hi awesome readers,

We are learning how to fix surface features. Surface features are little bits in writing. They are

punctuation, capitals and spelling. Here is an example: thissentsaChulymakessen Zbuttisrellyhrd to reed. This sentence doesn't have surface features.

On the room 9 site Mrs T put on a link to a story we have to fix. We had to read it three times. The first read I looked for at the end of the sentence.

This isn't my work. This is somebody else's writing we changed. The original:

He kept absolutely still as the footsteps got louder he tried not to suffocate as he laid under the bed he was wondering what had happened to his brother and his family. The man with the knife in his hand stormed around the house. Mums had boyfriends before but we had not thought that they would ever find us maybe he was one of them looking for revenge but why would he come. mum would just move and how did he find us we live on the other side of the planet from where all of mums boyfriends were so how could he find us he might have put a tracker on mum when he last saw her or on one of the devises ‘Hello where are you I know your here you're going to tell me where you're mother is or you shall join your father... in the skies so which will it be death or freedom you have 10 seconds chose wisely’.

Here is my version:

Riley kept absolutely still as the footsteps got louder. Riley tried not to suffocate as he laid under the bed. Riley was wondering what had happened to his brother and his family. The man with the blade in his hand stormed around the house. 

Mum has had boyfriends before but we had not thought that they would ever find us. Maybe he was one of them looking for revenge, but why would he come? Mum would just move. How did he find us? We live on the other side of the planet from where all of mum’s boyfriends were. How could he find us? He might have put a tracker, on mum when he last saw her, or on one of her devises. 

“Hello, where are you? I know you are here. You're going to tell me where your mother is or you shall join your father... in the skies. so which will it be, death or freedom! You have ten seconds to chose wisely.”

Can you Spot the Difference. Tell me the difference in the comment section. The first person to get all the changes get a shout out in my next blog post. Have a nice day bye.

student summit

hi reader,

I went to the students Summit. I think you are wondering what is a student Summit. A students Summit is a thing where students from schools from all over the uru Manuka cluster teach news online tolls. the online tolls me Jade and Sean tort storyboard that. 

I also went to some workshops. The First workshop I went to was how to use canva. The second workshop I went to was the one me jade and sean was doing. The third one I went to was how to use scratch Junior. The forth one I went to was how to use mihi maker. Here is some photos of me Sean and Jade doing our presentation.

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 hi readers

this is about my word of the week. The word this week is cantankerous. Here is my work.

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super fun super sports

Hello everybody,

This week we are learning about writing with language features. We have learnt a lot of language features. We need to use them. So we decided to write recounts.

These are all the language features we have been learning in the past weeks:

• Onomatopoeia - ‘Bang’
• Metaphor - “You are the sun!’
• Personification “The clouds danced across the sky.”
• Hyperboles - “I was so embarrassed I would have stuck my head in the toilet to hide.”
• Alliteration - “It was time for super Sunday sports.”
• Dialogue - “Don’t move,” Ellenessa whispered.

So the first thing did was answer questions in our document: who, what, when, where, and how. The second thing did was find all the places we were going to use a language feature. The third thing we did was write our story. Here is what I did

Who? 

• Coach
• Teammates
• Miss D

What?

• Winter sport
• Netball - Netballs going Bang - Feet going Thud
• We walk over with (miss D) and our team.

Why?

How?

Where?

It is time for winter sports. I call it the Super Fun Friday sports. We play against the other Schools in our Cluster.  The sport I played is netball. The sports team I play for is the Hornby Primary School rubies. 

Today we are playing, South Hornby School (aka S.H.S). Miss D isn't here today.

Here is a photo of me playing netball.

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Word of the week.

 Hi readers

This is about my word of the week. This week's word is indignant. Here is my work.

Thank you for reading my blog post. Have you learn something new today? Have you use the word indignant before? Did you know what it means? Have you ever felt indignant before? Bye for now. Stay safe.

Hi reader

This is about my maths. I made a collage from pictures of nature. Did you know a dog sense of smell is stronger than a human's sense of smell. Did you know in Wellington Zoo day has a tortoise which is really old. Did you know the Huntaway Labrador cross has one of the most strongest sense of smell, it'll smell is 3 times stronger than a human sense of smell. Oops did I go over with the animal facts I mean meant to show you a collage. Anyway here is my work.

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Word of the week

Hi readers

This is about my word of the week. This week's word is defiant. Have you ever felt defiant. Here is my work.

Thank you for reading my blog post. Have you learn something today? Have you ever use the word Defiant before? Bye. 🙂👋